Monday, May 3, 2010

Essay Examples from 2010, part II

For part II of the essay examples, we have actually included two essays from a particularly strong writer who will be here next fall. All of her essays were great, making it too difficult to choose just one. I hope these samples give everyone a little insight into the strength of our applicants, and as well serve as praiseworthy representations of high quality writing.



Essay 1

During football season, "Banner Thursday" is a bear.
As an aspiring artist who also happens to be cheer captain, it's my job to rally the seventeen girls on my cheerleading squad, put them to work, and translate the illustrations in my mind to paper that stretches roughly thirty yards.
"Micaela!" I hear. "Now what do I do?"
It's draining, but fun. Because at the end of that four hours of chaos, questions and organization, we always manage to produce a beautiful banner that no other high school can match. Then comes Friday night, when we raise the banner to kick off the football game and welcome the Marist War Eagles onto the field in style. I always look at our banners with pride, right up to the moment that the players tromp through my masterpiece and leave forgotten artwork beneath their cleats.
The War Eagles lost this year in the playoffs in overtime. But producing that banner will remain my lasting impression as a senior cheerleader. It's four hours of work for a short-lived moment in the spotlight, but it's a moment I would never substitute.
In fact, I save pictures of the banners, each conveying more memories than words could ever express.


 Essay 2

 No single song can fully embody every element of my complex personality. My IPod has 1072 tunes, each one a theme song that conveys a memory, a feeling, or a moment.
But as I read Essay D's requirements, one particular memory of music instantly flooded my thoughts and took me back in time.
I was standing eye level to the counter in my parent's bathroom, searching for trinkets to satisfy my short attention span. My father, a man who wears vintage suits and dances to funky beats, entered the bathroom with a Boombox belting "Pretty Young Thing," a classic Michael Jackson hit.
I was four years old and swept away by my dad's spontaneity and his array of goofy dance moves; I tried to imitate him, and he laughed and then we laughed.
I am currently listening to "Pretty Young Thing" and for four minutes and one second, the videotape in my mind replays and I relive that exact moment in the bathroom. By playing that song, I experience the past while living in the present.
My IPod serves as my diary of sounds, including the first moment when a daughter remembers her father saying, "I want to love you, (P.Y.T.), pretty young thing."
                                                                            Micaela L.

13 comments:

  1. i payed my deposit payment, so should i go ahead and start my alcohol and drug online class

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  2. Anon: If you would like, you can move forward with the MyStudentBody.com online alcohol awareness course at http://www.uhs.uga.edu/mystudentbody/index.html. This must be completed by the first day of class at UGA.

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  3. Wow! very impressive essays ... amazing writer she is! She proves herself to be very intellectual, so deserving to be a future "Dawg"
    Thanks for sharing.

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  4. patient transferMay 3, 2010 at 5:01 PM

    that was amazing

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  5. do you know when numbers will be released for anxious wait-listed students? I don't mean to nag...HAHA

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  6. Anon: I hope to have more information on the wait-list situation later this week, but I cannot say exactly what will happen yet, as we are still looking at deposit numbers.

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  7. On facebook people are saying that they have gotten off the waitlist, yikes.

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  8. Anon: Since I was away for one and a half days, and I was not able to get together with the other senior members of the admissions staff, I do not have details yet of the wait-list situation. We have gone out with a very small number of wait-list offers (split between summer/fall and spring), but it is very limited.

    As you have seen from past comments, when I do not have specific details, I wait until I know specifics before posting. I will try to have something out tomorrow, but please be patient until I have more details. Any calls or emails about the wait-list right now will not be beneficial, as we are juggling a great deal right now (deposits, summer orientation sign-up, transfer decisions, etc.), so please be patient.

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  9. In speaking with someone today about the wait list, they said with certainty that the wait list is completely random. Is this true or false?

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  10. Sorry not to clarify. I meant completely random has to who will be chosen off of it, not who was chosen to be put on it.... Thanks.

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  11. DGraves:

    Does UGA look at the difficulty of each class as a component to whether a transfer student is accepted or not, or just the grade and credit hours?

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  12. Anon I: Please see my new post on the wait-list.

    Hopeful: For transfer applicants, we are focused on the grades and hours.

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  13. that was really good! wish something intriguing would strike through my head :?

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